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Writing Prompt: It hadn’t occurred to me (Part 2).

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Pulling into the driveway, I could have kicked myself for still hoping that nothing had changed. That we were returning home, and that our little family was complete. I hit the button for the second garage door, murmuring a litany of promises. If only Nick was here, somehow we could have worked everything out. But I could see at a glance that Nick’s car, an enormous Land Cruiser, was not there.

I parked the car and activated the garage door, not daring to leave the car until it was shut. It had nearly scared me witless when Jodi Simmons had appeared at the car window the last time we’d come home. She had been insistent about speaking to Nick, and had only left when I threatened to call the police. Mia had started to cry, but through her shaking sobs I could hear Jodi’s promise to return for answers.

I got Mia inside and settled, and put the shopping away on autopilot. The light on the answering machine was flashing, and the counter read 14 messages, but I knew none of them were from Nick. I checked my phone, scrolling past text messages from clients. I knew the content without looking. Increasingly terse requests to get Nick to call them. I’d felt anxious when they started to come through, and had replied to a few of them. But when Nick stopped taking my calls, or responding to my messages, there didn’t seem any point in promising something that couldn’t be delivered.

With a sigh, I called Nick again. I knew what I was going to say, the words that I’d leave. But instead of a ringtone, or going straight to voicemail, a recorded voice advised me that the number was no longer connected. I dropped the phone and doubled over, bile rising in my throat.

A cheery ‘ding-dong’ filled the air, and Mia started to clap her hands together. Someone was at the door. I slowly straightened up, one hand covering my mouth. I raced over to pick Mia up.

‘Shush, honey, quiet now.’

Mia burbled, and I held her small hands together with one of mine. We walked to the kitchen at the rear of the house, and I looked at the monitor in the corner above the oven to see who was at the front door. It was Jodi Simmons. And she wasn’t alone.

This was written to a prompt at my local writing group.

4 responses to “Writing Prompt: It hadn’t occurred to me (Part 2).”

  1. debdancingstarhawken7 Avatar
    debdancingstarhawken7

    You have to make this into a book. The air of mystery is amazing. Nothing much is going on, yet EVERYTHING is going on. An unpleasant but simple encounter at a supermarket has so many potential layers. Is hubby alive or dead? Is he a criminal or has he been forced into something by criminals? Are the accusations wrong, but there’s something else. Did she not know because he’s doing nothing or is he a master criminal who’s been cheating her all these years. Or is she asleep and this is a dream? I have questions and possibilities teeming through my mind…seriously… you’re very good.

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    1. jml297 Avatar
      jml297

      Oh Deb, you’ve made my day! Really love how you’ve thought through some of the options that may be at play here, and it’s a story that could go in a myriad of directions. I’ll see where it goes next and will share it in a future post.
      And thank you so much for your positive feedback. It really means so much to me.

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  2. msw blog Avatar
    msw blog

    My heart hurts for this poor woman. This needs to be a full story as I am so invested…lol  

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    1. jml297 Avatar
      jml297

      Thank you! I’m intrigued as well, so will see where the story goes next and will share it when I can 😉

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